Off Hwy 101 - 3:47 pm
Mint Tea. Small strip of a town with two exits off the freeway, which seems really built up - new bridges, emergency lanes on both sides of each two lanes per direction. The town is about four blocks long, with one intersection that leads back to the freeway.
Besides some of the locals, including some older, rural worn hippies, either tourists or forest folk are here to hang out or to shop for vital goods not yielded under the canopy. One advantage of the town is a cell phone tower that allowed me to connect with Patrick to get his exit and arranged to go out to dinner.
Garberville Information
Now that my third Julie Bruck class at the Writing Salon is concluded, here are few things to work on when editing my poems -
1. What is the poem trying say - what thesis or statement of message is missing?
2. Avoid gerunds
3. Remove extraneous words - slim down the verbage
4. Where is all the detail and description going?
5. With the backdrop securely painted, where is the action?
6. Audience? Who is the poem for?
7. ARe the line breaks in the right place?
8. What does the poem sound like? Is there music - rhyme, rhythm, and or poignant words or phrases that sing in the ear?
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